Contest Deadlines:

•December 31st
•March 31st
•June 30th
•September 30th
•Contest year ends at midnight on 30 Sept.

http://www.writersofthefuture.com/rules.htm


Once again, I need to work up some short stories/novelettes for these sorts of things. Bah! LOL But maybe some of you have 'em on hand

Ok so I polished up a story and need some help. Is there anyone available to take a run through it and see if there is anything glaring (btw I am sure there will be) I want to try and submit this story to this contest so my deadline plays in here of needing to submit it by sept 30th.

Please please let me know if anyone is able to help me.

How long is it? I'd probably be able to look it over & give you my (very) amatuer opinion once I'm feeling better (I should be by the end of the week, tops).

I could take a look, too, and make some sort of remark. The sooner you can send it the better. School starts a week from now.

Hehe, if you ladies both have Word 2007, Jebi & I could each make comment bubbles in different colors!

Ahhh!! That sounds fantastic. Not sure I have it though. I have Word 2003 right now, and I had a Microsoft Office CD that I might be able to discover as I clean and pack...

If you need me, I can help too

Its Just under the maximum of 17k words And thank you thank you. email? or is there a way to upload it to here?

Well, I know Raya can make it its own little place like she did with my Gilded Shadows but it'd probably be safer if you sent it to the three of via email? That would also make it easier for us to suggest changes (or in the cases of punctuational/ grammatical, just make them outright) in the document itself.

What do you think, Raya? Jebi? Should she send to all three of us at once & then consolodate the changes? Or do you think one document to pass from one of us to another? IE, send to me first, I'll make my changes & send on to Jebi who'd then send to Raya?

EDIT: And my best-bet email is Qnsown at gmail dot com which I think is different from what I have listed on here.

You should change your listed email, Kally. Then I wouldn't get rejects of the user apps for you

We can try doing it at the same time. But honestly, I don't think it needs all three of us. I suggest that Kally and Jebi try it simultaneously and send it back to Suzy. If she still has questions or needs more input, she can send the altered version to me.

Send it on over then, Suzy

EDIT: I just checked. My "email" tab at the bottom of my posts does indeed send to the email I listed in my previous post so you can just clicky on that.

I'd think sending it along one after another may take more time for a deadline that is creeping nearer. I vote for the simultaneous dealie. My email is mymy42@wowway.com

Sent it out and again a HUGE Thank you to all of you for your time, support and help with my writing. I start college in a couple weeks (going for Nursing, with side classes in writing). First up for me is English 1a-college level woot! Maybe I will learn something, lol.

Ok, I read over the whole thing on Sunday. You have a very lovely, interesting story here but it needs A LOT of punctuation & grammar work. That, I will do without much comment. Beyond that, I'll use strikethrough (usually with a comment explaining) of things I'd highly recommend removing & highlighting for things I've gone ahead & changed (again, with comments).

The beginning needs some heavy work. I struggled through the first half page because of the information dumping you do all at once. After that, I was much more intrigued & wanted to keep going. But judges, if they feel that way at the start, will not press on.

Most, if not all, of that "information dump" is mentioned sprinkled through later on, anyway. I know why you did it, I do it myself. Getting started can be hard & feel stilted until you get into the groove & you're putting down the information because you want to cement it into your own head before you start.

But overall, it's a very creatively done tale & worth developing. We'll see what we can do

Yeah actually this story was the product of 2009 nano and it made it to 23k words I had to trim it down to 17k or under. I removed chapter one so were that starts is what was chapter two. Would it help you for me to send you the original chapter one? Maybe it would make a difference I dont know. Yeah I know my punctuation and grammer are really bad. Sigh I start English class in two weeks. I am going to put 110% into retaining the information and learning so I wont need as much help more just critique. Either way though I really am so greatful that you are willing to help me. Thank you.

I was trying to keep in mind that it needed a clear begining, middle, end and restructured it to fit that. but chopping out 6k words was a pretty big deal. I took out whole scenes, lol.

Let me know if there is anything I can do that would make it an easier task.

if you want to reach me by phone (usually easier since I work 2 jobs now ) its 707-357-1269 or txts

Again Thank you